Lotta quick fixes here.
"brunt earth, the brunt smell..." You mean burnt, right?
"I decided to get to the top...I run up...and grabbed" Tense issues. You should change run to ran.
“I had climbed buildings and other stuff” How about other structures?
“They all had cuts and bruises covering the surface of their skin.” Could just be nitpicking, but that sounds a bit awkward. I suggest on the skin or you can cut that part out all together.
“An intimidating enemy was definitely what I though of at first sight” I'd write, He struck me as an intimidating enemy at first sight.
“Purple aura surrounded his body and his hands had the same expect it was amore intense, vibrant purple.” What? I think you accidentally omitted something. You're trying to compare his powers to someone else, right...?
"augmented my energy" I know what you're trying to say, but I there are better words. Summoned. Mustered. Magnified. Intensified.
There's some other stuff, but nothing major. The only things I'm seeing are awkward wordings. Don't worry to much about grammatical things until you're done with everything. I think it's easier to be able to examine the work in its entirety.
O: O: O: O: O: O: O: O: YOUR EVILE? AHHHHHHH
"Taidoku" wrote:EVEN THOUGH I JUST USED EXCLAMATION MARKS THERE, DOESNT MEAN IM EVIL, BUT IT MEANS YOU TRICKED ME INTO PUTTING EXCLAMATION MARKS, MERE MORTAL
Yassss, I am evil. You now know my secret. o.o
EVEN THOUGH I JUST USED EXCLAMATION MARKS THERE, DOESNT MEAN IM EVIL, BUT IT MEANS YOU TRICKED ME INTO PUTTING EXCLAMATION MARKS, MERE MORTAL
"Thunderpandapaw" wrote:It's just a chat forum! You can talk about anything you want! :3Sorry, I just like typing with exclamation points.
Exclamations marks are EVILE!!!