Banned for not being an avocado.
This is my first story, please tell me if it was good or bad, and please be honest. "Ugh, where am I?" A girl of 13 awoken, she only saw black, all darkness surrounding her as if she was trapped inside. "I don't even remember my name, " she said to herself. It took a few seconds to notice she was not alone. There was a boy about her age. "Who are you?" The boy squinted at the girl and something tugged at his memory, but he couldn't remember what the memory was. "I don't even know who I am. It's all so fuzzy," the girl replied. "Well, where are we? I feel like my memories have been taken away," the boy told her,"How do we get out of this place?" Then they saw someone else, something told the girl the person was dangerous. Shivers went down the girl's spine and her knees felt like rubber. The person came closer and closer. "Who are you," the boy asked. "Guess." The person smirked, he or she was in a cloak and you could hardly see their face, their red hair looked the color of red licorice. "Oh you must be the newcomers, the twins Kate and Ivan, I am Titanium! Just kidding, why are you not laughing?" The red headed person uncovered her face, she had fangs and crimson eyes. She's a vampire, Kate thought. She looks like me and Kate, Ivan thought. "I am your sister, Rose," she hugged the twins and Kate and Ivan felt awkward,"We are the royal family of vampires, you should meet mother and father. "You are quite a chatterbox, Rose," Kate blurted out. "Sorry, " Rose laughed. Then suddenly faster then you can say zap, Rose, Kate, and Ivan were in a throne room. "Mother, I found them," Rose said. "Ok, whatever you say," the queen said. "Follow me!" Rose grabbed Kate and Ivan by the arm in a tight grip and ran off as quick as lightning. Is Rose always this... energetic, Kate thought. "This is your bedroom, Kate. You are me share a room!" Rose had a huge grin like Cheshire Cat. Then Rose showe Ivan his room, then Rose ran off to the throne room,"Get comfortable!" Kate sighed and looked at the red room with tons of roses. Kate looked in the mirror, huh, I thought vampires had no reflection, must be a myth, Kate wondered. Then Kate saw a note and read it, the note said, Megan and Michael the twins shall be our next victims, will act at 12 PM Wednesday the next week after we capture them. Wait, I'm not Kate, I'm Megan, and Michael's my twin brother! Wednesday is next week! So what did you think? If I get good results I will continue the story!
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