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Does this sound good for a prologue?

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Posted about 6 years ago

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PrologueHowls. Howls coming from one mile away. I continued running, crashing, and jumping through leaves, trees, and logs. They were coming closer... closer, until they caught up with me. I stopped running."You can't get away this time," said a voice coming from behind a tree. Sorry for the weird entering! (It came out wrong).

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"imqueenofengland" wrote:

PrologueHowls. Howls coming from one mile away. I continued running, crashing, and jumping through leaves, trees, and logs. They were coming closer... closer, until they caught up with me. I stopped running."You can't get away this time," said a voice coming from behind a tree. Sorry for the weird entering! (It came out wrong).
It's okay. A bit short and it could use a TINY bit more detail but other than that it's pretty good. Big Grin 

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"umbreon2000" wrote:

"imqueenofengland" wrote:

PrologueHowls. Howls coming from one mile away. I continued running, crashing, and jumping through leaves, trees, and logs. They were coming closer... closer, until they caught up with me. I stopped running."You can't get away this time," said a voice coming from behind a tree. Sorry for the weird entering! (It came out wrong).
It's okay. A bit short and it could use a TINY bit more detail but other than that it's pretty good. Big Grin 
I also think that it should be longer and more detailed. And the sentences are also a bit short. But maybe it is what you wanted, to give it some special feeling Wink What will the story be about? xD


Posted about 6 years ago
Longer/More detail, pretty good.

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Posted about 4 years ago

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It would be amazing if it were a bit longer. Big Grin 


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