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Okay, this is just a poem of mine that i wrote a few day ago, i hope you guys like it. i'm a bit shy though Blush Stars~ They shine brightly againsed the dark sky, Piercing the darkness, They wink at us, And we stare in awe, They put on shows, Shooting in the sky, Giving the brightness to the night They give us guidance They give us understanding, They pray for us, knowing whats going on, Telling us to never give up, No matter what, They wink at us~ it took me a while to finish this, but i hope you guys like it smile

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My critism is still under construction, so do not blame me. A beautiful poem.  Describes the functions of the stars in such a way, I was shocked.  I give it two thumbs up.

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"mon135" wrote:

My critism is still under construction, so do not blame me. A beautiful poem. Describes the functions of the stars in such a way, I was shocked. I give it two thumbs up.
No problem. I need the critisim. If i don't get it, how will i ever get better? Thanks by the way smile it took me quite long to finish such a short poem Frustrated

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