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Posted over 12 years ago

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It may stink, but I need feedback. Please be nice, but honest.

It doesn`t have a title yet.

? by CarrieFan23

Verse 1

I promised myself I wouldn`t cry,
But you never even said goodbye.

I promised that I would just let go,
but you never gave me the chance to show,
just how much I care. and now I..

Chourus 1

Just can`t believe how much I miss you,
no one knows what I`m going through.
It makes it so hard for me to move on,
When I hear... That same old song.

It`s been two months now, I guess I know,
That you really, have let go.

You called me just yesterday,
But I just didn`t have the words to say,
just what you did for me. Now I`m...

Chourus 2

Just sitting here, wonderin` why you weren`t there,
I don`t know how much more pain I can bare.
It makes it so hard for me to move on,
When I Hear... That Same old Song

Bridge

Today I am one year older,
Every Day my heart grows colder.
I wonder if you know,
I will never let go.

Repeat chourus 1&2

Tag: (softly) I heard Our song yesterday, I don`t know what to say.... (Spoken) Anymore.

This was all A true story. I only write from real life experiences.




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Posted over 12 years ago

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Date: 6/28/2005 3:10:24 PM
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If that''s the whole song, not only is it unbelievably short, but the lyrics are cliched and I''m sure theres songs that have almost the same exact lyrics (And more because real songs are longer). To put it short and honest it''s not that good, but keep practicing. I was writing songs for about 6 months because they even started getting remotely good. Even now I can still use practice. Plus you need better subject matter. Don''t write about that cliche stuff unless you can make it cool and unique.


U have some weird obsession with cliches.......

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Posted over 12 years ago

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Thank you for the feedback! I `ve been writing since I was seven, but I usually just write to express my emotions. So I just write, and I don`t worry about anything else.

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Posted over 12 years ago

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the song has a nice feel to it. i think u should work on putting stronger words into the versses but it''s really not bad. sure it''s cliche, but if those are your emotions and u wear them on you''re sleve, don''t worry about what bloggers have to say. if u like it, that''s all that matter.


Posted over 12 years ago

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wow...i really liked that....it was really good !!!


Posted over 12 years ago

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Thanx, Calli Grl 36 27. I`m glad you liked it!

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Posted over 12 years ago

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Date: 6/28/2005 3:06:40 PM
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It may stink, but I need feedback. Please be nice, but honest.

It doesn`t have a title yet.

? by CarrieFan23

Verse 1

I promised myself I wouldn`t cry,
But you never even said goodbye.

I promised that I would just let go,
but you never gave me the chance to show,
just how much I care. and now I..

Chourus 1

Just can`t believe how much I miss you,
no one knows what I`m going through.
It makes it so hard for me to move on,
When I hear... That same old song.

It`s been two months now, I guess I know,
That you really, have let go.

You called me just yesterday,
But I just didn`t have the words to say,
just what you did for me. Now I`m...

Chourus 2

Just sitting here, wonderin` why you weren`t there,
I don`t know how much more pain I can bare.
It makes it so hard for me to move on,
When I Hear... That Same old Song

Bridge

Today I am one year older,
Every Day my heart grows colder.
I wonder if you know,
I will never let go.

Repeat chourus 1&2

Tag: (softly) I heard Our song yesterday, I don`t know what to say.... (Spoken) Anymore.

This was all A true story. I only write from real life experiences.







For your first time, thats awesome! If you make any more, make them longer. Like I said, thats was awesome. *claps hands*

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~~**Christy**~~

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Posted over 12 years ago

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I know a good title "Let Go". What do you think?

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~~**Christy**~~

FrIeNdS aRe FoReVeR
bOyS aRe WhAtEvEr!!!!

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Ally
Steph
Gwathie
Gigi
Erin
Keith
Licia





Posted over 12 years ago

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"Let Go" is a great title! thank you!

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Posted over 12 years ago

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Hi this is Carriefan23!

I just thought I`d tell you that this song means nothing to me anymore.
It`s stupid, because I don`t feel the same way about my situation.
The person I wrote about, is not the same person.

He`s a J-E-R-K Jerk!

Therefore, I don`t miss this person anymore!

I`m working on a new song called: I don`t Care/Jerk. I`ll post it when I`m done.

I haven`t chosen a title yet.
I like them both.

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