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Please comment on my short story!!!

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Posted almost 10 years ago
THIS IS MY SHORT STORY PLEASE COMMENT ON IT!

As I woke up lying on that beach I didn't know who I was or where I was or how I got there all I knew was that I was alone. As I stood up I realized that I was on an Island. All around me was a vast array of water. The island I was on was small and did not have many trees you really couldn't even call it an island it was more like a mound of land in the vast ocean. I looked in the water and that is when I noticed that all around me were dolphins. I figured that they had seen me in the water and brought me back to land but I wasn't sure. The dolphins looked at me with there big eyes as if they expected my to do something. Where there wasn't dolphins I noticed my reflection in the water I was completely naked. I was coldx I figured that I had been on the island for a while because I wasn't very wet. I looked up at the sky so many stars I had never seen so many before in my life. It was dark so I lied back down and looked at the stars then I fell asleep. The next morning it was very bright outside the sun hurt my eyes I looked around the dolphins were still there I decided to get into the water with them and when I did they swam around me then one of them came up and nuzzled me I thought that she was the one who found me. They were squeaking all around me so I started to come up with my own dolphin noises I squeaked and clicked and had tons of fun. Then one of them brought me a fish I took it in my hands and ripped off bits of flesh with my teeth. It was then that I realized that I was part of the colony. I felt special!

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Posted almost 10 years ago
I thought it was good?

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Posted almost 10 years ago
Thats so cute! I like it so much I wish I thought of it. Lol!

Whee.


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