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"Get out of here!" I scream at my brother as he looked at me despairingly, wanting deserately to save me from the door that was closing above my head. We both knew I would be imprisioned, locked up starved in a horrible cell. Let me take you back to the beginning; where this horror all started. This is 2332, and any people who had lived in the USA 300 years ago either fled or are dead. A rebel organization has taken over the seven continents. My name is Dawn Brown. I am fourteen years old. My ancestors did not flee; they stayed to defend their country. My parents are dead. The only kin I know of is my brother, Jay, who is eleven, hopefully far, far away from here.

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Hi, I'm Sandy. This is Chapter one. 
 Will post Chapter two if at least five people post. :3


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Anyone?
Please?


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It's good so far. tip: if you make them a little longer then that might helps carry the readers on. don't forget to add a cliff hanger every few chapters. 


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"otakunini" wrote:

It's good so far. tip: if you make them a little longer then that might helps carry the readers on. don't forget to add a cliff hanger every few chapters. 
Thank you. I forgot to edit that it was only part of chapter one, I kept writing.


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In Love with this!!!!!


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@apenforyourthoughts
THANK YOU!!! Big Grin
Anyway, I have to go to bed. I will post in the morning.


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