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its for my writing class' poetry slam tommorow and i need feedback,so please...
"Breakfast"
I always wake up to food
It seems to set my mood
It's either waffles or pancakes
Hash-browns or mancakes
And what is a waffle without syrup?
I must have syrup or else it'll taste like a turnip
Syrup,syrup,syrup,I'm missing you today
I might as well go eat breakfast in may
I love you dearly
Turnips merely
I must have you today

I live in America and I love anime.Here's what I wanna say to you : BLUE CHICKENS AND MONKEYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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btw mancakes are giant pancakes

I live in America and I love anime.Here's what I wanna say to you : BLUE CHICKENS AND MONKEYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Toriko
One of my favorite animes
toriko


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Cute poem!

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thx,im going against 2 of the smartest people in my class,the winner gets a suprise,my friend dared me to do it since he thinks im such a good writer(i always help him with spelling and stuff)

I live in America and I love anime.Here's what I wanna say to you : BLUE CHICKENS AND MONKEYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Toriko
One of my favorite animes
toriko


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-nods -

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the poem makes me hungry. Wink

Being normal is so boring~
Why not be insane instead?
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"shae508" wrote:

the poem makes me hungry. Wink

haha,yeah

I live in America and I love anime.Here's what I wanna say to you : BLUE CHICKENS AND MONKEYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Toriko
One of my favorite animes
toriko


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Cute, I like it! ;3


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I heard that poems express feelings. Read this:
Water, Water, everywhere,
But not a drop to drink.
Doesn't that make you thirsty? So, if reading your poem makes you hungry when you read/hear it, then you should be able to tell if it has feeling.

(Thanks for helping me remeber that, Shae508!)

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No roleplay is quite the same, no matter how many times we use the same plot. Each one presents a new challenge, a new adventure.


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"WizardGirl3311" wrote:

I heard that poems express feelings. Read this:

Water, Water, everywhere,

But not a drop to drink.

Doesn't that make you thirsty? So, if reading your poem makes you hungry when you read/hear it, then you should be able to tell if it has feeling.


(Thanks for helping me remeber that, Shae508!)




your welcome!

Being normal is so boring~
Why not be insane instead?
Devil

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