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Kirsteeeeen
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Posted over 3 years ago
You have some really great ideas there. I can't wait to hear more as they form into a more solid plot. Good beginning. Big Grin

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Posted over 3 years ago
c: Aw, thanks.


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Posted over 3 years ago
fabulous =] 


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Posted over 3 years ago

"classicalmusicisepic" wrote:



"-HeavenlyAngel-" wrote:


I will tell you my honest opinion. This is a sad story... but very childish! There are also MANY grammatical issues! I am only telling you this so you can make it better, not to hurt your feelings. Most writers go through almost ten or more rough drafts before they can write the final paper! But keep trying, you can strive to be whatever you want to be but it will take a lot of work! Big Grin
c: I know, but I'm asking how my WRITING is. Not grammar.


{Not to become involved in an argument, but grammar is a huge part of writing, and I understand from this comment that the person was merely being honest and in extent, trying to be helpful, which is what every writer wants. I personally agree that this is a sad and touching story, but perhaps some more description or more suspense to the storyline (even some interesting characters) might make this more enjoyable to read and write. All up, I believe it has potential and I am simply expressing my opinions}. 

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