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I'm still not sure about the title, might change it.
Also, I have the annoying habit of changing between past and present tense. I don't realise I'm doing it, sorry.
I'll use this post to put information and stuff, when I've written info...

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(I won't be posting this in chapters, just random paragraphs when I write them)

I blinked slowly, my eyes trying to adjust to the darkness surrounding me. The air around me was cold, a cold that made my body ache all over. I forced my self to sit up, unable to stop myself from shivering, and tried to look around. I couldn’t see at all, clasping my hands together I concentrated my energy into creating fire for light. Opening my hands I held a small flame in one palm and began looking about. I let out a gasp when I saw that I was in what appeared to be a cave. I forced myself to stand up and realized just how stiff my body was. I tried to walk but pain shot through my legs with each movement. The cold was becoming unbearable and I could hardly keep the flame alight, I was freezing to death. 

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As the flame began to disappear I heard a #### nearby, I would have jumped if I wasn’t so cold. I knelt down and forced myself to keep the flame burning. In the dim red light I saw a few people nearby, I didn’t recognise them but I could see that they were all freezing too. My flame went out then, once again we were surrounded by darkness, and I curled into myself in an attempt to stay warm. I felt something push up beside me, slight warmth coming from it. I moved my hand toward the thing and touched something soft. Moving my hand over it I figured that I was touching fur, it must be some sort of animal. The question as to what animal was answered when I heard a pained meow came from the creature.

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Despite the pain of moving I grabbed the cat and pulled it into me, hoping I can warm it a little. Judging from how small it is I can guess it's a kitten and it made my heartache that such a young creature had to suffer through this torment. As it nuzzles into my neck I try and work out why I'm here. It feels like my brain is full of smoke, I can't get my thoughts straight. Opening my mouth to call out the cold air clings to my throat and no noise escapes. I close my mouth and then my eyes, praying that this will end soon. The smoke in my brain begins to get thicker and I feel myself slipping into sleep.

(Lets hope someone reads this soon)

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( It's a good story so far, it grabs you from the start and is intriguing, you also have good grammar as far as I can see, so I really can't fault it. I'll be anxiously awaiting the next part c: )


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(Thank you! Share this to anyone you think might like it)
(I said I wasn't posting it in whole Chapters, but I'll say when chapters start...from now on)

Chapter Two

I feel something soft rubbing up against my face and I open my eyes to work out what it is. I can't see anything. I blink a few times and shake my head, trying to clear it. After awhile I begin to remember, the cave and the cold. Judging from the ground I'm still in the cave but it's not cold anymore. It's not warm enough but I'm not freezing. There is also a strange weight on my chest. Sitting up I hear a hiss and feel claws dig into my hand.  A gasp in pain and pull away from the cat, clutching my hand to stop any bleeding. "Who's there!?"A voice yells out of the dark, not to far from me.

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(This story's pretty cool so far!)

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(Thanks- Heads up, the story gets a bit morbid in this chapter. I promise you the whole thing won't be like this)

I hear two people respond, one with a shrill squeal and a gruff voice asking who was asking. "There's three people besides yourself."I state calmly, I've always been able to keep fear out of my voice and I was glad of it right now. I'm terrified but in situations like this you can't panic. Opening my palm I concentrate my energy into creating a flame, letting it grow large enough for me to see. I saw the face of a young woman, the back's of two men, a tawny brown kitten and three corpses.

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As the men turn around I look at the woman, her face had grown pale and she was staring at the bodies"A-are th-they d-"
"Yes, they're dead"I respond, she let's out a horrified gasp and feints.
When her head hits the ground she sits straight back up and clutches it. I turn my eyes away from her as the men go to her. Standing up I walk around the cave, 
 It's solid rock, perfectly circular with a domed roof and absolutely no means of entrance or exit. Without turning to face them I inform them of the situation and start tapping the wall. "There's no weak spot. It's impossible to get in or out."
"You mean we're stuck in here?"the woman wails.
"Yes. Now, since I can only see things in a small range with this light I need to set something on fire."
 

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(This next part is kind of messed up, once you finish the first bit you have to read the second even if you feel really disturbed.)

"Like what?"The gruff voiced man asks.
I ponder for awhile before saying"Cloth would work."
"I'm not giving you my clothes."he answers.
"Not our clothing. The dead don't need clothes, so we take it off the bodies"I say, kneeling down.
"You're disgusting!"the woman wails, she was beginning to annoy me.
I begin feeling around with one hand, trying to find the nearest body. When I grab hold of one I try not to flinch away from the cold skin. After getting a good grip on a piece of cloth I pull and here the ripping of fabric. Screwing it up into a ball I close my hands together until it catches alight. I start ripping off some more fabric when a loud crackling hiss echoes around and suddenly the cave was completely light. The woman let's out a shrill scream and I look at the hand holding the fire. Right beside it was the kitten, ablaze with flames. I jump up, screaming. I can feel the tears running down my face as I struggle to think of what to do.
 
"Do something!"The woman screams but I can't do anything but watch in horror.
One of the men rushes forward and goes to stamp out the flame. "Don't stand on it!"I cry, pulling him back.
We all watch, mortified, as the flames lick at the the body of the cat. Despite my panicked mind I can't help but notice the cat seems unfazed by the fact it's burning alive. In fact it's just sitting there, head tilted sideways, watching us curiously. It stands up and shakes, the flame's die down and it sits back down unscathed. The woman feints again and I fall to my knees, shaking. The kitten flicks it tail up and the end sparks a few times before a small flame appears. Then it proceeds to clean it's face, like nothing had happened.

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