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kukookristy
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Quite often I enter this thing called young writers and this year I've written  a poem. I'd love some advice before I send it off as it may end up published. No title yet.  And please don't copy this took a long time to write!

Turn the page, another, and then one more,
These things are enthralling, not some old bore.
You don't believe that, they just don't think like you.
You stay quiet,  turn the page, out of view.
Out of sight, out of view, Just your thoughts and you.
You like it that way, and so you say,
And really it gets better every day.
You stay quiet,  turn the page, out of view.
All the attention? You don't need it.
Things like that, in the back of your mind they sit.
Crowds,  lots of people? Thats not you.
Fictional characters in your books, and you.
"Another book?" you hear them whine
But your wrapped in the page, onto the next line.
Others see blue skys, green grass, the norm,
But for you, the world seems to transform.
The plain roads,  animals and trees,
Plain old skies and boring seas.
Not for you, Not with your view.
The people from your book spring to life around you,
The hobbits, the time travellers,  wizards and witches too.
Who needs reality if you've got books?  
Because nothing is really as it looks.

One Two Three Four I declare a time war
Five Six Seven Eight Daleks scream "ETERMINATE!"
Nine Ten Eleven Twelve The Doctor died and Silence fell
Twelve Eleven Ten Nine There he goes, back in time
Eight Seven Six Five Saving everybody's lives
Four Three Two One Grab her hand and whisper, "Run"

I'm a massive whovian and potterhead!!


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WOWEEEE THIS IS UBER-AWESOME DJDSJKSJJKSJKSJ  Big Grin
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kukookristy
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Thank you Sophie! My parents read it last night and entered it into the competition so there is now a chance that it may be published in a book with lots of other poems.
I've got into it once before,  for a poem m, and once ffor a drawing.  (Both when I was really young. )

One Two Three Four I declare a time war
Five Six Seven Eight Daleks scream "ETERMINATE!"
Nine Ten Eleven Twelve The Doctor died and Silence fell
Twelve Eleven Ten Nine There he goes, back in time
Eight Seven Six Five Saving everybody's lives
Four Three Two One Grab her hand and whisper, "Run"

I'm a massive whovian and potterhead!!


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"kukookristy" wrote:

Thank you Sophie! My parents read it last night and entered it into the competition so there is now a chance that it may be published in a book with lots of other poems.

I've got into it once before,  for a poem m, and once ffor a drawing.  (Both when I was really young. )
Your welcome and we did that stuff in Year 5 too. Me had to draw a design and if someone won from our class it got put on a t-shirt for a street fair, I didn't win though.Tongue Out

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awesome!!

I could walk but I dance, I could talk but I sing, I could smile but I laugh and I could think but I dream.

THIS IS MY SIGGY :P HA HA HA HA

Four a thought in my head I have three things two words five people going ONE DIRECTION....smile

be yourself...never let someone change u!!!

:P making these faces are addicting :P smile Big Grin Frustrated Wink Tongue


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"QTpie14" wrote:

awesome!!
Thanks! 

One Two Three Four I declare a time war
Five Six Seven Eight Daleks scream "ETERMINATE!"
Nine Ten Eleven Twelve The Doctor died and Silence fell
Twelve Eleven Ten Nine There he goes, back in time
Eight Seven Six Five Saving everybody's lives
Four Three Two One Grab her hand and whisper, "Run"

I'm a massive whovian and potterhead!!


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I loves this and its epical Big Grin

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"hugebear" wrote:

I loves this and its epical Big Grin


^^ Me opinion smile 

Thanks Huge!
Now I have to.wait between 2 and 10 weeks to find out if mine is one of the chosen ones. 

One Two Three Four I declare a time war
Five Six Seven Eight Daleks scream "ETERMINATE!"
Nine Ten Eleven Twelve The Doctor died and Silence fell
Twelve Eleven Ten Nine There he goes, back in time
Eight Seven Six Five Saving everybody's lives
Four Three Two One Grab her hand and whisper, "Run"

I'm a massive whovian and potterhead!!


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"kukookristy" wrote:



"hugebear" wrote:


I loves this and its epical Big Grin



^^ Me opinion smile 

Thanks Huge!
Now I have to.wait between 2 and 10 weeks to find out if mine is one of the chosen ones. 


Good luck Love I love your writing and I hope you get chosen smile  

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hugebear from gracie and mia
classicalmusicisepicdonethis for me siggy :love thank you

from classicalmusicisepic for mesiggy

HugeHugeHugeHuge
hugebearkeep calm and hug ted
HugeHugeHugeHuge


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"hugebear" wrote:

"kukookristy" wrote:



"hugebear" wrote:


I loves this and its epical Big Grin



^^ Me opinion smile 

Thanks Huge!
Now I have to.wait between 2 and 10 weeks to find out if mine is one of the chosen ones. 


Good luck Love I love your writing and I hope you get chosen smile  
Thanks again Huge!! Haha all fingers crossed. 

One Two Three Four I declare a time war
Five Six Seven Eight Daleks scream "ETERMINATE!"
Nine Ten Eleven Twelve The Doctor died and Silence fell
Twelve Eleven Ten Nine There he goes, back in time
Eight Seven Six Five Saving everybody's lives
Four Three Two One Grab her hand and whisper, "Run"

I'm a massive whovian and potterhead!!


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