Posted almost 4 years ago
i really want feedback for this, it's my first poem I've put on here, I hope you like it:
Listen,
Just shout your mouth and listen,
Just for a second,
Turn around,
I've been standing behind you for ten minutes,
Tapping you on the shoulder,
Asking you a question,
Its really important,
But you don't care,
Don't care that I'm your best friend,
Don't care that I need your help,
Don't care that I'm the one who has helped you a thousand times before,
Because you have a new friend now,
And suddenly I don't matter,
Suddenly I'm invisible,
To everyone,
But this is important,
So just shut your mouth and listen,
I need your help...
Listen,
Just shout your mouth and listen,
Just for a second,
Turn around,
I've been standing behind you for ten minutes,
Tapping you on the shoulder,
Asking you a question,
Its really important,
But you don't care,
Don't care that I'm your best friend,
Don't care that I need your help,
Don't care that I'm the one who has helped you a thousand times before,
Because you have a new friend now,
And suddenly I don't matter,
Suddenly I'm invisible,
To everyone,
But this is important,
So just shut your mouth and listen,
I need your help...
ShyFox
Read. Write. Listen. Live. Doodle.This is who I am, get over it 
