Hi everyone. I like writing poetry in my free time, and I wrote this one some days ago. I'm not sure if I want to publish it in my school magazine, so could you please help me out? Please be very frank and honest, hoping to hear from you soon, thanks!!
Was drowned by downpour
Her muffled screams were not to be heard
Her struggles to fight
Her aimless call of help
From her miserable plight
To save her son from the raging winds.
Mother nature could be beautiful
Just as she could be cruel
The hapless mother, in vain,
Trying to save the other
Son of five years got carried away
however hard she tried to save
None could save the poor souls that day
With a shock she realized
Her son was not alone
She was swept by the winds
Into the bay.
Pleased, Mother nature?
Killed two souls, alone in the world
As the Mother and Child fell to their death
Leaving a silence through the rumbling thunder
A silence that could not be filled any way.
Also, please could you suggest a name?