"shadgirl1" wrote:

"~Lovely Broken~" wrote:

Really good. =D

Thank'ee :3

No problem. I always love reading your story's. 

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great job plz write more

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"diamond99" wrote:

great job plz write more

Thank you. I shall...

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"shadgirl1" wrote:

Someone commented me asking where I got my inspiration for this... Truthfully? I had a staring contest with my dog.

Who won?

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"OnceForgotten" wrote:

"shadgirl1" wrote:

Someone commented me asking where I got my inspiration for this... Truthfully? I had a staring contest with my dog.

Who won?

She did. -.-

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Chapter 1- I felt an extreme pain in my left shoulder and neck area. My body shuddered in the pain that was slicing through my body. I felt like I was being torn apart, the inside of my eyelids were pure red. "W-WHAT IS HAPPENING!" I screamed, hoping someone, ANYONE would hear me. My head was pounding like crazy, that's all I could hear over my screaming, Thud. Thud. Thud. A small growl escaped my lips as I lie there, wherever I was. If I was still at home, my mom would hopefully find me. I let out another scream.  [more in a little]

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So, thoughts? Suggestions?

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"shadgirl1" wrote:

So, thoughts? Suggestions?

I think that I NEED MORE. It's perfect. Stop with the cliffhangers your killing me bro D;

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Its your story, we're not gonna force you  to do what we want when it's you creation. (;

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I love it! u should write more :3

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