"Starlight hills" wrote:

"EmzyLou" wrote:

OMG SO AWSOME!

Thx :3 (and btw will try to get more up tonight!)

OMG YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Zakk The rain beat down on me as I walked through the streets, wishing I'd brought an umbrella, or at least a jacket with a hood. My head hung low, my stare never moving from the ground as I trudged along in the worst rain we'd had for months. As I looked up, I was closer than I'd previously thought, only a block away from Scarlett's. Shane hadn't been lying: the car was still sat on the street, I noticed as I neared Scarlett's house. Even in the storm, I could see that there was someone sat in the front seat. And there's the catch. I sighed as I walked up to the car. I looked into the window, but couldn't see the person's face. The locks clicked and I opened the door slowly, still unable to figure out who it was. "Sit down." Their voice was cold and hard, and I knew who it was then. I ducked my head into the car, sitting down in the passenger seat. "What are you doing here?" I asked coldly, hoping there was no emotion in my tone. Their hand moved up to the switch for the interior lights, and the car lit up. Maddie gazed at me sadly-it looked almost as if she was looking straight through me. "My, god, what happened to you?" My eyes widened in disbelief and horrifying shock at the state she was in. Her face was white as a sheet, her eyes grey with almost no colour, cuts and bruises covered her skin and it looked like she hadn't eaten in days. I rested my hand on her arm, turning to face them, but she moved away. We sat in silence for a second, and she slowly raised her knees to her chest, turning to face me. "I-I..." She stumbled on her words, shaking her head, slowly at first, but didn't stop, an almost manic look in their eyes. "Look at me. Maddie. Hey, hey..." I held her shoulders, stopping her. "Calm. Down. Now, please, tell me what's wrong." "I-It was Sh-Shane, he..." A tear slipped down her cheek, and I felt rage bubble up inside me at the mention of his name. "What did he do to you?" I asked coldly, trying not to just flip out and start yelling. Maddie took a deep breath, closing her eyes tight. "He said..." She frowned in confusion. "He s-said it was my fault. That I-I'd ruined everything." What do you think? Sorry it wasn't up yesterday, but hope you like

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Great! Can't wait to read more!  Are you doing any more today?   ~Jiminy~ 

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"JiminyCrispies" wrote:

Great! Can't wait to read more!  Are you doing any more today?   ~Jiminy~ 

Yeah, i just started writing the next part

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"Starlight hills" wrote:

"JiminyCrispies" wrote:

Great! Can't wait to read more!  Are you doing any more today?   ~Jiminy~ 

Yeah, i just started writing the next part

Yay! Can't wait to read it   ~Jiminy~ 

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Really good. Can't wait to find out what happens next.

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Sometimes I want to go into the story and smack Shane. I'm having one of those moments right now. I loved it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Hope you write more soon!

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More please!!!

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The town was filled with bustling people as Maddie walked along, trying to fight against the tears falling down her face, but she lost. She continued, being shoved countless times by passerbys before cutting off from the bustle of the main street and down a smaller street. Tucking a strand of hair behind her ear, she stopped, a strange feeling that she was being followed. She turned suddenly, to find a figure stood just feet away. She knew who it was, she could see his dark green eyes glistening in the dim light as he took a step forward-while at the same time, she took a step back, wondering whether she could outrun him. "Don't even try it." He spat, moving closer with every painstakingly long second. She gulped. "I did everything you-" "No, you didn't." He shook his head, chuckling fakely. There was no emotion on his face or in his tone at all. He took a final step, grabbing her by the collar of her shirt. "What are you-?" Before she could finish, he pinned her up against the wall, anger now showing on his face. "How dare you even think of touching her?!" He snarled, raging. She looked around frantically, hoping someone would notice, but the area was completely empty. She felt his hands clamp around her throat, blocking her windpipe. She gasped, trying desperately to claw his hands away, but he just slid her up the wall so that her feet were dangling just above the ground. "It's your fault. You've ruined everything." He released her, turning away as her knees buckled and she fell to the floor. "If you hadn't done that, you might still have your precious Zakk, and I..." "You'd have Scarlett." She smirked weakly, her voice barely a hoarse whisper. "You seriously think she ever loved you, or ever will? Well, she doesn't, if anything, she hates you. Don't you remember what you did to her? Guess not." She scowled. "Shut. Up." He hissed, turning to face her and pulling her up. In his fury, he threw her against the wall opposite. Her head hit the concrete with an ear splitting crack! and she fell to the floor once more, blood trickling down her forehead. His face was as cold and hard as stone, he didn't care for that girl even in the slightest. He stepped over her body and walked away, leaving her unconscious in the deserted street. What do you think? Hope you like

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OMG! I love it!  When are you writing more?   ~Jiminy~ 

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