hey guys what do you think of this beginning to a story... ____________________________________________________________________ I was sitting next to a tree looking out in the never ending feild and petting my dog Skull. a small breeze was blowing my midnight black hair back and even though it's calming i can't stay calm..you don't need to now why yet. Well your probably woundering what my name is it's Alice like Alice in wounderland. And I have red eyes,i'm goth, I live alone,no school besides a library, no people to talk to, and i live in the middle of no where. The town is bout 10 miles away but when i go there i usally here "it's that goth chick." "oh gawd it's her.". When they say that I just glare at them. It may seem like i have no emotions I do but i keep them in the inside. Also i never get attached to people. If i do it makes it harder to leave. Oh and about that reason I am never calm is because....i'm on the run. On the run from the FBI and the goverment. ___________________________________________________________________ What do you think? should i use it for a story?

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Sounds good so far, but I do have a few things to point out. You should try to use capitals, check your spelling and put speech on separate lines. Apart from that, it sounds great! Hope to read more soon   ~Jiminy~ 

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thanks i try to do that but i keep forgetting to. and i don't really know how to spell so good.

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"meggmegg" wrote:

thanks i try to do that but i keep forgetting to. and i don't really know how to spell so good.

Np and it doesn't matter if you forget. Also, you could check to see if your computer has spell check. If not, then just spell it how you think lol   Can't wait to read more xD  ~Jiminy~ 

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lol kk thanks again!

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