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Working on chapter 2!!!!!!!!


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                    Chapter 2:  Attack of the Bullies                When the bus pulled up to the school, I got off. My sister and I walked into the school and got in line to find out our schedules, lockers, and homeroom assignments.        After I got them, I went straight to locker 52. I unloaded all my school supplies and put them in my locker, took what I needed for first period, shut the door, and put my lock on the locker. After, I walked straight to math. The first thing I saw was Ally. Oh no….         My math teacher handed out our books and for the next 50 minutes she blabbed on and on about how 6th grade math was fun (Yeah right).         I could hear the three girls behind me whispering. The only words I heard was: ugly, Molly, and dog. Even though I heard just those words, I knew they were talking about me. I could feel tears come to my eyes, but I just blinked them away.         After math class, I went back to my locker. I saw a folded up piece of line paper fall out of my locker when I opened it. I opened the note and it read: “Ugly dog girl.” I crumpled up the piece of paper and threw it in the nearest trash can.        By lunch time I was close to tears. I lined up in the lunch line and after I got my lunch, someone tripped me. I fell and dropped my lunch. When I lifted my head up, saw the Triple Trouble (My new name for Ally, Brielle, and Lily) group laughing, along with the rest of the people in the cafeteria.         I could feel tears fall down my cheeks. When I started picking up the mess of food, a girl that I thought was in my classes helped pick it up. “Hi, I’m Courtney,” said the girl, “I saw what happened, those girls are the popular kids that ruled Helen Keller Elementary last year. Now they have decided to rule the school this year too.”         “Hi, I’m Molly. I know. They have been torturing me all day. They keep calling me a dog, because of my name,” I said.         After Courtney and I picked up the mess and I got a new lunch, we talked all the way to a table. I finally have a friend.  ~ Sorry for such a short chapter.


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I think u r off to a good start, but in the first paragraph u mention something about bullying. I say focus a little more on that, or take that sentence out of the paragraph and put it somewhere else.

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"Crafty-Girl11" wrote:

I think u r off to a good start, but in the first paragraph u mention something about bullying. I say focus a little more on that, or take that sentence out of the paragraph and put it somewhere else.
That sentence was just a hint of what is going to happen later in the story (which is foreshadowing). In the second chapter that I just posted, she starts to get bullied.


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Just begun chapter 3!!!


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"-Happy Never After-" wrote:

"RawrSkittles=)" wrote:

OMG. I can relate to this story. smile
That is what I was trying to do. I wanted the story to relate to real life.
Then... GOOD JOB! Big Grin


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"RawrSkittles=)" wrote:

"-Happy Never After-" wrote:

"RawrSkittles=)" wrote:

OMG. I can relate to this story. smile
That is what I was trying to do. I wanted the story to relate to real life.
Then... GOOD JOB! Big Grin
xD


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Seems good so far Big Grin I like that this story is coming from the POV of a kid c:.

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Continue this! I wanna read more!

A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words.


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I love this story!!!!!!


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