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kamuimaru
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Would you separate a character's action and the same character's dialogue in different paragraphs?

     Phoenix picked up the clipboard on the middle of the table and gave an approving nod as he glanced at it. "Really," he said, slamming his hand on the defense's bench as if to reinforce his point, "some new data from the forensics labs prove your guilt, Karma!"

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     Phoenix picked up the clipboard on the middle of the table and gave an approving nod as he glanced at it. 
     "Really," he said, slamming his hand on the defense's bench as if to reinforce his point, "some new data from the forensics labs prove your guilt, Karma!"

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mainly the author's preference. 

some more fan-fictiony writers prefer to streamline it all together, as in your first example.

however to make it easier to read and slightly more "professional" you would separate the action and text. 


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"Jack Mack" wrote:

mainly the author's preference. 


some more fan-fictiony writers prefer to streamline it all together, as in your first example.


however to make it easier to read and slightly more "professional" you would separate the action and text. 

"Jack Mack" wrote:

mainly the author's preference. 


some more fan-fictiony writers prefer to streamline it all together, as in your first example.


however to make it easier to read and slightly more "professional" you would separate the action and text. 

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"Jack Mack" wrote:

mainly the author's preference. 


some more fan-fictiony writers prefer to streamline it all together, as in your first example.


however to make it easier to read and slightly more "professional" you would separate the action and text. 


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