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The year of 1916.
I be the the trenches.
I see as planes fly overhead.
I think to myself.
Why am I here?


A quick poem. 
I might make this into a short novel. Please tell me what you think of it. Thanks Wink


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Brilliant


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Thanks smile


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its good,it seems to be about war(it it is,what war?),it explains the setting,but i would give more details about the trench so readers can visualize it (just a suggestion,you don't have to take it)

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i like it. nicely done.

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It's okay. I don't really have a lot of structure to base it off of. But, it's decent. I've seen better and worse for short poems.


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Nice poem, I liked the way you've questioned yourself in the poem too smile 
I think it was really good, anyways c; 


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"membershipgirl" wrote:

Nice poem, I liked the way you've questioned yourself in the poem too smile 

I think it was really good, anyways c; 


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